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Re: Ecchiverse: Reset
« Reply #15 on: May 19, 2018, 05:22:35 PM »
Well this is kind of a filler chapter but ah, interesting things happened. I don't think you have to worry about a lack of ecchi anytime soon, Mr. Admin.

Chapter 6
Light projectors pulsed saturated neon beams in time with a droning bassline designed to pump up heartbeats. For as small as it was, EcchiPub knew how to have a good time.

Ecchi-tan curled her head by her sisters collarbone, with Lewds arm draped over her shoulder, keeping her nice and snuggled up. In front of them, a male performer exhibited his finest flexibility around the slick, rotating dance pole. It had been almost 12 hours since they had dispatched the raider MahluaandMilk on her mission.

You think shell make it? Ecchi-tan asked, turning her gaze to her twin.

Lewd-tan gave a hum that sounded like a question mark as she sipped the mojito in her other hand.

As strong as Mahlua is, physically and magically, she does have a pretty big weak spot. You know the one.

Lewd-tans lips curled around her glass. You mean the one between her legs?

Exactly. The first few floors shouldnt give her too many problems. Its the last couple Im worried about, Ecchi-tan said, shoving her nose against the bit of exposed flesh at her sisters collar.

Even if she fails, Lewd-tan replied, biting her lip, Shell have other opportunities. We can always train her ourselves. Coryn and Lego from MR City have been fantastic sparring partners, always keeping us on our toes, but we were really blindsighted during the Raid two years ago.

Ecchi-tan let out a soft giggle. You mean you were blindsighted two years ago when she found your weak spot. Hate to break it to ya, sis, but its not that hard to figure out.

An offended scoff matched the dead face Lewd-tan shot her twin.

Oh, dont give me that, Ecchi-tan rolled her eyes and gave her twin a playful slap on the chest. I know thats why you specifically targeted her group during the Raid last year. And why youre so hell-bent on putting her up the ranks with the other two.

Shes put in a lot of work to get where she is, Lewd-tan said defensively.

Im not disagreeing with that. I have my eye on her for my own reasons. All Im saying is that youre not slick. Sometimes I wonder just where you were on the day she was born

Lewd-tan straightened her posture. What do you mean by that?

Well, Ecchi-tan said, hoisting herself up to better look her sister in the eye, Its entirely possible that you were in the Weather Department of the Science Division, messing around with the thunderstorm. Or maybe you couldve been outside the walls of MR City, directing some magic.

As if I have the knowledge of the conditions necessary to create life. It was Lewd-tans turn to roll her eyes. Were Tans.

Goddesses, now. In a way, we always were, Ecchi-tan reminded her.

Not quite. I mean, technically any being can undergo apotheosis. We hadnt until we forged the soul gems and had their power released. Besides that, we still arent fully aware of our deity-level abilities. Im not sure either of us are lifebringers. Even if I am one, its a huge stretch to assume my power birthed Mahlua.

Lewd-tan punctuated her lecture with another sip of her mojito. It was amazing how she could turn a simple gesture into something so dismissive. She turned her gaze to the dancer before them, letting her eyes trace along the curve of his muscles as they held him suspended, upside-down from the pole. She put the glass down and leaned forward, letting a folded bill slip from her blazer sleeve between her fingers. The man gratefully took it between his lips on his next rotation around.

Ecchi-tan puffed out her cheeks in annoyance. Her twin really did have a one-track mind sometimes, hardly open to the possibilities. The next time Lewd-tan took a sip of her silly little drink that would never get her drunk anyway, Ecchi-tan popped the bottom of the glass, spilling its contents down her chest.

What the f8ck? Lewd-tan growled, pulling her lips down in a look of disgust.

Ecchi-tan swung herself over, letting one thigh rest on either side of Lewd-tans hips. She glared down, red eyes boring into pink. I need you to focus for a moment.

Youve certainly got my attention. Lewd-tan raised an eyebrow, wiping the remains of her drink from her chin.

This girl is dedicated. Shes been giving small offerings when she can at the temple. Shes been a champion in two of the biggest Raids in history. You shouldve seen how immediately she accepted the mission when she heard the rewards. Shes probably one of the best examples we have of someone with a foot in both worlds. Even with her present focus mostly being in MR City, she keeps her fingers on the pulse here.

None of this is exactly news, Lewd-tan said flatly.

Youre missing the point. The point is MR has a lot of heroes. Weve had our small glories with Kite, with Last, with Rubix, arguably with Forlorn, but consider this: What if Mahlua comes out victorious over the towers challenges? Well actually be able to say that we have someone. We could convert her, we really could, Ecchi-tan explained. She shifted her weight and rested her hands above Lewd-tans shoulders, steadying her upper body. We could make her one of us.

Lewd-tan chewed on her lip and turned her gaze to the side, thinking. You really are something else, she said, finally.

Oh, come on, Ecchi-tan groaned, pushing even closer. Her hips pressed against her sisters at a rather forceful angle. She could feel the dancers eyes on her back. Shes just the first. Im not giving up on the others. We dont need a savior or a hero; we just need a bad influence. Someone wholl really go out of the way, spreading our names across the net. Besides, with all that occultic knowledge she got from who knows where, is there anyone better to have by our side?

At first, Lewd-tan snapped to retort, but closed her mouth, considering her words more carefully. I only agreed to send her on the mission to add a little spice back into EcchiWorld, but what youre suggestingIts so insane it might just work. Just how long have you been planning this?

Ecchi-tan leaned in a little closer. The smell of alcohol was so strong in her nose that she could almost taste it. Since the first time you told me about how she almost completely knocked you on your ass in the Raid two years ago. Her role in releasing the soul gems was the icing on the cake.

You made some alterations to the tower, didnt you? Lewd-tan said, more of a statement than a question. She could read what was going on behind her sisters eyes.

Of course, Ecchi-tan chuckled. She craned her neck and rested her head where the smell of alcohol drew her and let her tongue fall out of her mouth, licking away the sugary stickiness of the lime and mint that clung to her sisters neck. Lewd-tan shivered.

What kind of hell are you putting that girl through right now? Lewd-tan managed to choke out, despite the sudden rush of heat to her chest and head and everywhere else.

Ecchi-tans voice dropped to a silky whisper. Shouldnt you be more worried about your personal hell at the moment?
"It is always by way of pain one arrives at pleasure."--Marquis de Sade
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Re: Ecchiverse: Reset
« Reply #16 on: May 19, 2018, 06:04:05 PM »
Mahlua, are you perhaps trying to make yourself into some sort of god? It feels an awful lot like you're trying to make yourself into some sort of god. What with this, "one of us" stuff.

Fair warning Mahlua. Don't make the god mistake.

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Re: Ecchiverse: Reset
« Reply #17 on: May 19, 2018, 06:10:05 PM »
Nah, more like a priestess. Imagine a god's secretary. More like that.
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Re: Ecchiverse: Reset
« Reply #18 on: May 19, 2018, 08:17:20 PM »
Also, I'm imagining that male dancer was just a treasure trove of images for the "reaction images from gay porn" meme.

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Re: Ecchiverse: Reset
« Reply #19 on: May 19, 2018, 08:28:40 PM »
That bill Lewd-tan slipped him may or may not have been a fifty.
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Re: Ecchiverse: Reset
« Reply #20 on: May 19, 2018, 11:22:27 PM »
High rollin'

Also, did Ecchi just, shatter the glass? Or what? Cause I wouldn't want to climb aboard anyone covered in glass shards. But maybe that's just me.

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Re: Ecchiverse: Reset
« Reply #21 on: May 20, 2018, 12:34:17 AM »
Whoops. Nah, she just did that annoying sibling thing where she bumps the butt end of it and made Lewd spill the drink all over herself. I should've wrote somewhere that Lewd put the empty glass down.

Great catch.
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Re: Ecchiverse: Reset
« Reply #22 on: May 20, 2018, 11:03:35 AM »
Speaking of, I think there was also a point where Ecchi asks a question, and then answers it herself, and then gives the follow up line. Somewhere towards the top. Pretty sure it just needs a name swap.

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Re: Ecchiverse: Reset
« Reply #23 on: May 21, 2018, 12:06:29 AM »
Bah, so I posted six minutes past midnight. I'm still counting it on my daily streak.
This one's for TinTin, wherever that crazy bastard went.


Chapter 7
Another pair of magnificent double doors rested at the top of the battlefield stairs. Mahlua did not expect the grand end of her journey behind them, but she didnt expect what she got, either.

As she heaved and pushed the massive stained glass doors aside, three beautiful maids stood before her and bowed deeply. Welcome, they said in unison. They rose, revealing just how similar they were. All three had black hair and deep brown eyes, and yet all three wore their hair differently. From left to right, one sported long hair with short bangs, the next with a cute bob, and the third medium length and parted to one side.

Wha..? Mahlua tried to process the new visual information.

The Lord is expecting you, the one in the middle said. She turned and began walking down the hallway.

Curious, Mahlua stepped forward. The other two maids flanked her, one gently removing her bag and the other going for her weapon belt. Woah, the raider said, striking a defensive stance. The maids shot her a very confused look.

We will be moving your belongings to your room. The Lord is expecting you, The long haired maid explained.

Mahlua clenched her fists in frustration. She wasnt sure she wanted to meet with this Lord of theirs unarmed, but the girls looked hurt by her display of mistrust. If she knew anything about a situation like this, to reject the offer was an insult to the rules of hospitality, which she was clearly being shown. She set her jaw, but forced her body to relax. Forgive me, she said, I am battle weary.

The two maids shared a look of relief and tended to taking the raiders heavy equipment from her. Up ahead, the third stood patiently in the hallway, hands clasped elegantly in front of her. Once her equipment was securely removed, Mahlua strode forward to catch up.

The maid with the bob cut led her across a grand stairwell into a side room separated by impossibly tall doors. In that room, Mahluas eyes followed a long dining table to the figure of a man sitting at its head. As she entered the room, he stood.

The man adorned himself in what appeared to be a sharp blue military uniform, colored with pins and badges of honor. White chords hung at his shoulders, and long cascading blonde hair behind them. He had very long features and intense, stormy grey eyes, and yet he looked rather young. Welcome to my home, he smiled warmly. He showed his gloved palm and gestured to the seat at the other end of the table. Please, sit. I am sure you have many questions, which we will discuss.

Yes, thank you, Mahlua said, keeping her eyes on the man as the maid pulled the chair out. Mahlua sat and kept her posture as straight as she could. She was not used to formal situations.

That will be all, Norberta, the man addressed the maid.

She gave a small bow. Thank you, my Lord, she said, then turned and exited.

Now, the man said, brushing the tails of his long jacket behind himself as he sat, As you may have observed, I am the Lord of this household. I am only known as Lord or Master. I have observed you as well, and your battle with the first guardian of this place.

Mahlua twitched uncomfortably.

Have no fear, the Master said, tilting his head and flashing another winning smile. She and I rarely see eye to eye when it comes to worthiness. My challenge is far less brusque. I prefer to be upfront about my methods.

The pause settled in the air. When Mahlua was certain he had finished speaking, she asked, So then, what is your challenge?

It would do well for me to first explain the nature of this tower, so as to better prepare you for the tasks that lie ahead.

Thats very kind of you, Mahlua said calmly, although her eyebrow twitched. The Master waved his hand, as if to say Its nothing.

Ecchi Tower has seven levels. The first of which, as you saw, belongs to the ecchi trope of schoolgirls. Mine, as you have probably figured out, deals with that of maids. Above me is the realm of the kemonomimi, and from up, there are general monster girls, and above them, well, level five more or less serves as the obligatory beach episode reprise. Believe me, you will need it. The last two levels are by far the most challenging. One deals with the fantasies you have on the surface, and then, the ones you do not wish to confront. As of yet, there have been no victors who have tamed Ecchi Tower. Theoretically, should one conquer their desires and be deemed worthy, they would establish a connection with the heart of EcchiWorld itself. Such a person would not become more powerful, per se, but they would become something of a guardian themselves, for the external aspects of the city. The Twins have attempted before to have such a champion, but thus far they have beenunsuccessful. Then again, their experiments have involved spam ninjas and ghost spectres particular to EcchiWorld. Useless fodder, most of them. Schoolgirl usually handles them. I personally believe they have only kept up their experiments to amuse us.

Another pause washed over the room, glittering it with sunlight from the tall windows on either side. Mahlua pressed her lip into a flat line, thinking. Clearly, the Master was open to answering just about any question.

So, what exactly does a failed challenge look like? She figured she would go for knocking out as many stupid mistakes as she could.

The Master tilted his head from one side to the other. It varies by which floor youre on, but, in theory, the connection is that each challenge deals with some aspect of ecchi. To give in and take things too far, or to be overwhelmed by the situations any floor presents, marks a failure.

I see, so because I comforted that girl and it led to a kiss, Mahlua thought aloud.

Precisely. However, that situation caused another to form that aligns with an ecchi trope: a misinterpreted forced kiss. Since that could happen to an ecchi harem protagonist, it was not a complete fail. It is my belief that her anger with you stems from you correcting the kiss, which an ecchi protagonist is not likely to do at all. She is quite easily offended, you see.

If thats the case, then what constitutes a pass? Mahlua asked, leaning back and dropping her posture despite herself.

The Masters smile tightened. Now that is a very good question. You will be put into situations designed to arouse you in small ways. You know that you must not falter or give into the illusion, and yet, resistance isnt the point either. Rather, the point is acceptance. That is why my challenge will be to entertain you for a total of 24 hours, during which I will have my maids perform specific tasks. They will report to me of their successes and progress in their individual assignments. Some will be innocent, such as food, drink, and sleep, but others will be intended to probe you and tempt you. With that said, he rose from his seat again and called to the door. You may enter now, Nori, Nora, Norberta.

The large dining hall door slid open again, and the three maids filed out in the order they were called: Nori with the longest hair, Nora with the medium, Norberta with the short.

See to it that our guest is prepared for bed. No doubt they are weary from Schoolgirls troubles.

Yes, my Lord.
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Re: Ecchiverse: Reset
« Reply #24 on: May 21, 2018, 10:46:47 AM »
How on earth you got energy to write so much ? ))  I think the story is better better with each new chapter. ))

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« Reply #25 on: May 21, 2018, 10:53:12 PM »
Well that does certainly give a road map. Doing a couple chapters per level then?

It is refreshing to have a little structure though. It's felt a lot like flying blind until this point. But y'know, I got to feel bad for the spam ninjas and guest specters. Even non-sentients don't deserve to be experimented on by the Twins like that.

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« Reply #26 on: May 21, 2018, 10:55:33 PM »
Yeah, I feel you. But, with EcchiWorld going quiet as frequently as it does, I can't say that I don't understand their boredom.

To be fair, I only just got the whole thing settled in my head. Originally there were going to be nine levels and then I was like hahalol no I will literally die.

HUZZAH. It may be a little shorter than I would have liked, but I am, in fact, uploading before midnight.


Chapter 8
More than anything, Mahlua was relieved when the maids guided her to her room and she found that her weapons and other materials were safely left at the foot of the bed. She knelt and reviewed her stock.

Behind her, Norberta spoke. We will prepare breakfast in the morning and wake you when it is ready. That will be when your 24 hours begins. Rest well, the maid said, then gave a small bow before exiting.

Nori and Nora lingered for a moment. Mahlua put her things in order and sat on the bed, looking between them. So, the raider said to break the silence, What will be for breakfast tomorrow?

Omelets stuffed with your choice of fillings, Nora replied.

Thank you, Mahlua said, and then, after a moment, That will be all. At the command, the two maids gave a small bow and quietly left the room.

With that, Mahlua flopped on the bed and stared at the ceiling. She thought for a moment about the day ahead. No doubt shenanigans would ensue from the moment one of the maids came to wake her. And how would they choose to do so? A hot chill crashed over the raider at the thought. She bit her lip and rolled to the side, as if it would distance her from the thought she had while facing the other direction. Despite her efforts, it took a while for her racing heart to drift to sleep.

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There was a sound of a curtain sliding on its railing and the sensation bright morning light pouring right over Mahluas eyes. She groaned and tugged the covers with her as she rolled over. Weight sunk the bed away from the raider and a gentle hand rested on her shoulder.

Breakfast is ready, the maid whispered softly.

Mahlua cracked open an eye and rolled back over. With the way the sun filtered in so much white light, Nori almost looked like an angel, posed as gracefully as she was. With a grunt, Mahlua propped herself up on her elbows. Nori retracted her hand.

Ill prepare your seat at the table, Nori said. She rose from her place on the bed and left to perform her task.

Mahlua wondered if perhaps the Master had cast a glamour on the girls. Still dazed, she swung her feet over the side of the bed and started getting ready.

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Breakfast tasted like heavenif heaven was a three-egg omelet stuffed with an impossible amount of cheese and veggies. The Master did not attend, but Mahlua was certain she could feel his stormy-eyed presence somewhere nearby.

After she finished her meal, Mahlua left her plate and exited the room. Outside, Norberta waited for her. Mahlua raised an inquisitive eyebrow.

Based on the Lords observations, you enjoy battle. If youd like, we can spar in the courtyard.

Sure thing, Mahlua said, Just as soon as the food settles.

Of course, Norberta smiled, offering a small bow.

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A faint breeze kept the combat partners from getting too hot in the sun that began peeking its way up to its midheaven. Never mind how there was a courtyard and with sunlight on the second floor of a seven story building. No wonder the reality distortion field was so strong around the tower.

Mahlua went for a punch. Norberta swerved and sent a fist flying for a hook. Mahlua deflected it with her forearm and thrust her knee forward. The two stopped as knee touched ribs, and then took a step back in appreciation.

Guess thats another one for me, Mahlua said, offering her hand out for a shake. Youre not going easy on me, are you?

Of course not. We are maids first and foremost, after all, Norberta replied, giving the hand a firm shake.

The door to the courtyard clicked open, and Nora walked out, holding a tray with a glass and a pitcher. Im back with the drink you requested, she announced.

Ah, yes. Thank you, Mahlua said.

Nora placed the tray on a short garden table and poured the pale pink contents of the pitcher into the glass, and then handed the glass to Mahlua. Mahlua took a few sips and smiled as her tastebuds were caressed by the refreshing taste of raspberry lemonade (because strawberry lemonade is so overrated).

Once again, Mahlua let her eyes settle on one of the maids. First Nori, now Nora. Time seemed to slow down as she noticed the tiniest details. She blinked rapidly and turned her focus back on the raspberry lemonade. There was definitely something fishy going on.

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Back inside, the raider noticed just how much of a sweat she had worked up sparring. Her stomach sank a little. She would have to take a shower, but knowing her luck, shed be offered a bath, and if ecchi anime was any indication, some sh*t was about to go down. Despite her concern, she turned to Norberta.

Before the words could leave her mouth, Norberta responded. It looks like the sparring was a good work out for you. Would you like a bath to freshen up?

Yes, I would. Where would I go for that? Mahlua said, licking her now dry lips.

Follow me. I will tend to it, Norberta replied as she walked forward. How do you like your water?

Mahlua blushed at the ears and followed. I prefer it to be hot enough to turn me a little pink, but not enough to burn after long exposure.

I see, Norberta turned to show her smile. The Lord is very similar. He says it helps him clear his head.

Yes, its the same for me. I feel more connected and grounded with heat rather than cold.

That would make sense, if lightning is your primary magic.

Mahlua stumbled over her own feet. It shouldnt have surprised her that she knew; the Master had mentioned observing her battle with Schoolgirl. Somehow, though, these girls just kept surprising her.

Here we are, Norberta said, snapping Mahlua back to her senses. The maid opened the door a crack at first, and then all the way.

Inside, the tile floor rose around a massive pool-size bath. Norberta made her way to one head of it and adjusted a few knobs. Water began to fill the bath, and before long, steam rose from it.

Would you like any oils for fragrance? the maid asked as she finished adjusting the knobs.

Ive never had oils in a bath before, Mahlua admitted, Since usually Im pretty broke, but Ill try it out. She shuffled uncomfortably, unsure if she was expected to begin undressing.

Norberta turned her attention to a few bottles in a cabinet near the door. Mahlua had missed it coming in. The maid then took a handful of them and spread their contents along the still filling tub. By the time that task was done, she returned to the knobs and cut the water off.

There are towels in here for when youre finished, Norberta explained as she put away the oils. I will begin preparing lunch and planning for dinner. Please relax and enjoy the rest of your day.

With that, the maid politely made her exit, and Mahlua sighed a sigh of relief. Thank the gods, she said aloud as she peeled away her clothes. She carefully folded them and placed them on a small counter near the cabinet.

Mahlua stuck a careful foot in the water. Pleased, she let herself slide in and breathe the fragrances. She tried to pick out what scents they were. Definitely rose petalit dominated the room. A touch of vanilla sugar perhaps. There was also a hint of another flower. Honeysuckle. Another blush crept up the raiders neck to her ears. Love smells, commonly used for magic and aphrodesiacs, all of them.

Stupid, stupid, stupid. Why did she agree to something like that? How did the witch fall for that?

She let her head sink under the water for a few moments to calm down. Its entirely possible that the maid has absolutely no acute knowledge of magical associations and the flowery scents are common here. The witch came back up for a deep breath.

Enjoying your day so far? a soothing male voice called.
« Last Edit: May 21, 2018, 11:50:32 PM by MahluaandMilk »
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Re: Ecchiverse: Reset
« Reply #27 on: May 22, 2018, 07:23:32 AM »
dun dun duuuuuun.

Bayonetta music works too well here.

Hope you have all this in one word document because I picked these typos out : Malhlua and Omelets


Also in this scene:  Mahlua kicked herself in the rear for not asking where that was, but she had other things to worry about

Not impossible, I just find it hilarious heel-kicking your butt in frustration hahaha. Or was it purely metaphorical?


Have to shamefully admit the kissing scene was on point. My moral compass is useless. Thank goodness I'm not legomaestro, just some other dude named Rubix.


Really love the flow of the conversations and the like. You have a knack for representing the twins. Pretty interesting story and great output. Keep at it.


Someone needs to fight for those guest spectre's rights though. They get experimented on everywhere.
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« Reply #28 on: May 22, 2018, 06:54:09 PM »
Bayonetta music feels like such a copout because it's always 12/10, but thanks.

Whoops. I have each chapter in a word doc but no matter how many times I add "Mahlua" to the dictionary MS Word still redlines it, so I usually ignore it. I'm pretty sure it told me to correct to "omelets" though. It's not showing up as a redline here either.

When I was in aerobics, "butt kicks" was an actual name of a leg warm up we would do. Your heel pretty much does fwap your ass. But yes, the scene was metaphorical.

I mostly tried to focus on the "Well, this is gross, but I'm already here, so f*ck it" aspect. Glad it isn't absolutely horrible.

Funny, because I generally hate writing dialogue. I feel like I'm being too repetitive, but I've been told it's easier to follow now that I use character's names instead of descriptors for the most part. I wonder what could possibly make me so good at representing the Twins? Maybe Ecchi-tan has a point about the mysterious whereabouts of Lewd-tan on the day Mahlua was born...

Fair point. Poor guest spectres. To think, they're probably actual people on other sites.

I'll be starting chapter 9 a little late today thanks to some drama llamas all up in my business this morning, but maybe I'll get it out before tomorrow morning.
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« Reply #29 on: May 22, 2018, 10:40:29 PM »
Just try not to think about your own guest spectres out there.

Nice little chapter though. Seems like we're getting a little twist. Really made me want to take a nice bath. Too bad I have a tiny tub that leaks if you try to fill it. >.>


It's good to use names. With dialogue it's best not to over the think the transitions. You can refer through description at times if it feels suiting for the moment, but when you're reading, it all flies by anyway.